Brax
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Join date : 2013-11-15
Age : 20
Posts : 884
Location : Traveling the universe.
 |  Subject: Re: Ace Hill (Zyx)  Sat May 30, 2015 4:36 am | |
| Hey Zyx,
Hello! I'm sure you know the drill well enough, I just have a few things that need clarification, is she bisexual or asexual? This needs to be put into the history. What age is she? I know you say old enough, but how old is old?
You say that her occupation is complicated, yet not specify it in the history, in which you give us a "It will be told through roleplay." It doesn't give us a complete sense of her character, where she comes from, why is her family unknown, why her personality is the way it is...why doesn't she like humans?
These are some of the questions that should be considered.
Once you have made these changes, lemme know and I'll take another look. _________________ [You must be registered and logged in to see this image.]"Look forwards into life, not backwards...otherwise you may find your face planted into the back of a lamp-post." -Flannagan |
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Zyx
Newb
Join date : 2015-05-29
Age : 19
Posts : 9
Location : The Universe
| | Subject: Re: Ace Hill (Zyx) Sat May 30, 2015 7:11 am | |
| Sorry, I haven't done a real roleplay in ages. I need to get better at this, hence the joining of this site... |
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Zyx
Newb
Join date : 2015-05-29
Age : 19
Posts : 9
Location : The Universe
| | Subject: Re: Ace Hill (Zyx) Sat May 30, 2015 7:45 am | |
| Fixed. I used my own template for my site... so... yeah. |
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