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PostSubject: sammy ray :)   Mon Jun 15, 2015 7:57 pm

(I cant figure out how to put my picture. sorry)

Sammy ray Jackson

Species: Human
Age:100 (I might of fell into some sort of space poop. im not really sure but I cant grow old so im basically a 19 year old boy for a long time. im working on reversing it but with not luck im still 19.)
Gender:male
Occupation: time agent
Status: unknown


::Appearance::
Hair: short red
Eyes: blue
Height: 6 feet
Figure: fit figure
Other: tattooed ribcage
Clothing: I usually wear a brownish jacket with all my clothes.

::Info::
Family: none. sometime a female (or male) companion
Personality: I'm a sadistic a-hole. I am a pyromaniac. im pretty much a total butt face.
Strengths: I'm wondrous, curious, and pleasant.  
Weakness: I'm not really smart, I hate waiting, and I get aggravated easily  
Likes: I like pizza, chocolate, and hot men in ties
Dislikes: Broccoli and normal people
Dream: I want to be amazing.

History: I left my family at 18 to travel the universe. i was really lost when i fell into something that makes me never age. i watched my family die from afar. since then i have traveled the universe looking for a way to reverse whatever has happened to me.

HOW DID YOU FIND US?:friends


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PostSubject: Re: sammy ray :)   Mon Jun 15, 2015 8:28 pm

Whoo. Uh.

Okay, where do we start with this?

First, let's start with something a tad bit positive. It's alright about your picture. The site won't let you post one until you've been on for like... I think it's a week. We just ask you to make the picture your avatar, and it looks like you have.

But there is a WHOLE lot of work to do before this is near acceptable.

For one, Sammy is 100 years old. That's perfectly fine, but... How? Most ages around 16-60 don't require much explanation, but 100 years old? For something that impressive, we're going to need some background information. Was he just healthy? In which case, he's going to be a brittle old man who is prone to illness and not suited for adventure. Which, of course, you CAN roleplay, but if that wasn't your intent, you're going to need a whole lot of explanation.

Secondly, "normal" doesn't mean anything. There is no such thing as normal. Does he wear t-shirts? Does he wear jackets? Does he like tanktops or maybe dress clothes? What kind of shoes does he have? Does he wear jeans? Sweats? There's no information here. It's not completely vital information during an RP, but we are going to ask you for it.

Let's look at your history. It... It's nonexistent. There is nothing here. We don't know anything about your character. What do you mean, travel? Where does he come from? How does he travel? You mentioned companions, what about them? Why is his family distant? What happened when he was younger? We have zero information about this person and cannot accept this.

Not to mention, you completely skipped the RP sample. It is, in fact, a vital part of the application process. Please go back to the form and look at the sample instructions so you can include it at the end of your post. Out of all the things we need to know about you before you can get started, this is the most important.

Seeing as you're going to have a lot of editing to do, I should let you know that the "edit" button is the sonic screwdriver at the top of your post. Good luck.

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