Mark Extinct

Mark Extinct Is A 15 Year Old Boy, Pale With Freckles, and Usually wears dirty glasses. He Lived With His Parents Until He Was 13 Which He Then Moved To London, And Got A Job As An Employee At A 24 Hour Cafe.

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Mark Extinct

Human
19
Male
Works At a 24 Café in London
Citizen

Black Hair
Brown eyes
63 Inches Tall
Skinny
Glasses
Usually Wears A T-shirt And Sweatpa nts with crocs


Family: A mom, Cristi, And A Dad: Kurt
Cheerful, nerdy, kind
Strengths: His Family, Traveling
Weaknesses: His Family, Risk Of being Stuck
Likes: Collecting, Writing
Dislikes: Math, Sleep
Dream: Traveling The Universe

History:
Mark Grew Up in springfield Missouri, always dreaming of traeling. After college Mark Packed His Bags, and moved to London. He now lives in an apartment, with only two rooms, and now has a job at a 24hour café.

Okay, I know he's only 19, but that is still old enough for a history longer than 3 sentences. All in all, I really can't tell that much about him here, and you completely missed filling out the personality field. I need to know what he's done in life so far, what he aspires to, why he's aspired to this, what his personality niches are and how they relate, a little more elaboration on his strengths/weaknesses.

And can you please actually fill out the form? For the first half you kind of left out the fields and just pasted the information. It's easier to see whether you got everything if you actually use the template.

Name: mark Extinct


Species: Human
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Occupation: 24 Hour Cafe In London
Status: Citizen


Appearance:
Hair: Black
Eyes: Brown
Height: 63 Inches Tall
Figure: Skinny
Accessories: Glasses
Clothing: Usually wears a T-shirt and Sweat pants


Info:
Family: A mom, Cristi, a dad, Kurt, and a dead brother, Max.
Personality: Was once a cheerful, social guy, until his brother died, hes now a shy, kinda geeky guy, who likes to be alone
Strengths: His family, The Doctors Life
Weaknesses: His Family, Being left behind
Likes: Apples, Video Games, Christmas
Dislikes: Bugs, Nightmares, Math

History: Mark Was Born In Springfield, Missouri, on August 22, 2003. He Grew Up loving the world around him, watching documentaries in famous landmarks. Then, in 2006, he had a brother, Named Max. He loved his brother, and played games with him whenever there was time. But when he was in the middle of college, his brother was hit by a car, coming to go see him. Mark then became more independent. He played games on his computer, and watched YouTube by himself more. He barely ever called his parents, and one day, He packed his bags, and moved to London, into a two room apartment. Having to pay the bills, Mark got a job, at an outside 24 Hour Cafe.

Alright, looking better. Can you tell me more about why his family is a strength (or a weakness)? I get the impression that he just sort of drifted apart from them. Also explain the being left behind part, because again, it struck me that he become a loner.

Also, what do you mean by "The Doctor's Life?"

His Family Is very close to him, and he will do anything to save them. unfortunately, that also means he would do some very bad things to save them.

"The Doctors Life" means after he met the doctor and saw what an amzing man he was, he would also push himself far past his limits to save the Doctor.

So even though he's kinda drifted apart from his family, he's still close to them?

As for the Doctor's life, I REALLY feel you shouldn't act like you've met him already without confirming this with another Doctor and just develop that in an RP.

Ok.

So, After Losing his family he has drifted apart more from them, but holds them closely as they are the only family he has left.

And ill erase that DOCTOR part. Also, Ive edited my other ones, to.

Hey there Mark!

I'm just going to add to what Meta's said. I read that he had lost his brother, perhaps describe what happened after that, before he became independent. What did he do? How did he overcome his brother's death, as it was sudden and that they have been growing up with one another for x amount of years.

There's a large gap between his what i presume young teenagehood into their adult life, why did they decide to move to London?

I still think that the personality needs a bit of work, as there is a lot of potential that you could add, make him a more rounded character. You don't have to write loads, but it's for other players who might want to play with your character and see what he's all about.

Strengths and weaknesses, could you elaborate or add a few more? I don't think you should add in Doctor's life until you've got approval from another doctor (which is what Meta said).